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Okay new game: hooked or not hooked.....
meg_evonne:
"OK, he's dead. You can go ahead and talk to him." - Hey love this one. Is it a quote? I'm not familiar with it, btw I did pick up Charlie Huston's "Already Dead" and enjoyed it. Thank you for the referral! There was a lot to like in there from style to technique. It doesn't grab me like JB does, but well worth the money to buy it. It's a tad on the dark side for me. I will pick some more of that author's titles up.
meg_evonne:
Re-reading Don's post and now prefer it the original way---since my editing is over for the moment on the YA. Sigh. Don't you love it when you edit it, then a month later change it back the way it was originally? Worse yet? When it's your editor that does it!!!! :-)
the neurovore of Zur-En-Aargh:
--- Quote from: meg_evonne on August 03, 2009, 03:34:55 PM ---"OK, he's dead. You can go ahead and talk to him." - Hey love this one. Is it a quote?
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It is, indeed; Greg Egan's Distress, an interestingly strange medium-near-future SF book. It's not the best Egan's ever done, by quite a ways actually considering Permutation City and Diaspora, but it's got the best hook first line.
--- Quote --- I did pick up Charlie Huston's "Already Dead" and enjoyed it. Thank you for the referral! There was a lot to like in there from style to technique. It doesn't grab me like JB does, but well worth the money to buy it. It's a tad on the dark side for me. I will pick some more of that author's titles up.
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Glad you enjoyed; the fifth and last of those is due in October, so as urban fantasy series goes it has the advantage of having a clearly defined and failry close actual end. Though they do stay about that level of dark all the way through.
thausgt:
These stories are from the vaults. Haven't really worked on either of them in years, but I'd love to hear some opinions:
“Floyd Marlin, are you aware that the Federal law which you have been accused of breaking carries a mandatory death-sentence if you are found guilty?”
"The evil wizard spat a blob of slime, hate and magick directly into my left eye, and another in my right."
“'Welcome to the Treehouse,'” the stranger said, in slightly accented 21st century English, settling himself down in the seat across from me as I set down my pint of rich, amber-hued cider. As the language had been subsumed by Dutch more than two centuries ago in this particular parallel world, he had my full attention. I had never seen him before, so he would also have my pint in his face if he didn't explain himself. Quickly."
LizW65:
I would definitely cut the words "in this particular parallel world." First, how would the narrator know he/she is in a parallel world, and second, I think it would be more interesting to show that gradually instead of stating it right off the bat. Otherwise, #3 has my attention.
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