Hi . I would like to submit a Sponsored Magic for review . I have had a lot of trouble with it and have made some drastic changes from its original concept . This is Very similar to Hunger magic ( a rolled up sponsored magic and vampirism ). What I'm concerned the most is its cost and if I have missed something obvious . The Focus part is for "convenience and clarity" . Please comment .
Edit : Changed as per Belilal666 recommendation .
Blessing of The Dark Sun [-5]
Description: You have earned the blessing of The Dark Sun .
Sponsor: The remnants of this ancient being are faded but It is an immortal after all . It deals in Power and its preferred currency is blood . All power granted to you must be employed in accordance with its agenda . Failure to do so will incur its wrath .
Agenda: Its agenda seems to be the destruction of supernatural predators and will aid you in your efforts to uphold it . Its sworn enemies are Necromancers . Its servitors are Fire Elementals and Shadows .
Evocation : In accordance with Its duality you have access to Black-fire (active during day) and Shadow-heart (active during night) .
Black-fire : Black flames consume your enemies . ( Satisfies catch for Fire , mundane or magical )
Shadow-heart : Subtle and insidious powers (veils , mind magic and spirit manipulation) befuddle your foes . With enough skill , their minds are yours to command . ( Only mental attacks , or their equivalent , can be made with this power )
Thaumaturgy : Rituals cast by the power of this ancient being must uphold its agenda and nature .
Evothaum : By using your Power reserves , you can cast thaumaturgy with Evocation's speed and methods . Doing so , causes you to immediately take one hunger stress on top of the mental one . ( At the end of the scene you will suffer Feeding Failure equal to the number of spells you cast )
Spell Drinker : You are resistant to magic ( Armour : 1 against Magic )
Focus : All your focus items for evocation provide bonus for Black-fire , Shadow-heart , Evothaum . This power allows you to take additional Sponsored Magic at reduced cost . Their foci must be specific for each one .
Musts : Vampirism , Feeding dependency and Marked by Power