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Paynesgrey:
Depending on the overall tone you're shooting for, check out John D. MacDonald's Travis MacGee books.  They're all richly penned, like Raymond Chandler set in Ft Lauderdale in the 60's-70's.  MacDonald paints some excellent word pictures to describe character's look and personality.  Check out The Deep Blue Goodbye.

Sir Huron Stone:
What do you guys think of this?

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--- Quote --- I continued fiddling with the thing until I heard a voice behind me say, “You have to reboot its brain first, then it’s loading algorithms. If you start the loading algorithms first, the droid brain gets confused and just shuts down again.” I spun around and pointed my blaster right at the sun burned forehead of the man behind me. He held up his hands and said, “I surrender.” His green eyes flashed with amusement, and he smiled, his straight white teeth a marked contrast to his sunburned skin. He idly scratched his short black hair, and I noticed his hands were covered in blisters. His clothes were covered in dust, making distinguishing the colors impossible, and his leather work boots were cracked and the steel toes were showing.
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Paynesgrey:
Looks good, I'd say.

Snowleopard:

--- Quote from: Sir Huron Stone on February 09, 2012, 04:30:18 PM ---What do you guys think of this?

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Looks pretty good as PG says - there are a couple of things I'd change myself but pretty good.

shades of grey:
Nice.

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