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I like it! Its catchy, it concisely delivers the world mechanics without losing the pace or getting lost in exposition. Something about Gabriel being dressed in business casual make me laugh more than it probably should :D
One question: If they get their memories wiped each time they get reincarnated, how does he know all the rules etc? How is gabriel and the haze of the Veil familiar to him?
Torvaldr:
That will be coming in another post. But in short, when they are Reborn all their memories of being an angel are repressed, and any memories of a former life(s) are also repressed. Those in the know call this "being asleep". Those who have regained, or opened those old memories are called "being awake". Usually if one of the reborn is killed, and they have not been judged "lost" and will be given a final outcasting, they have their memories repressed and locked away, and then are born again as an infant into a human family. As I said this is a short explanation. I will be fleshed out in a more detailed way later.
The image of Gabe dressed like that just came to me, almost like in a dream. It makes me laugh a bit too.
Torvaldr:
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You know, people make a lot out of the Fall of the Angels, and the Casting Out from Heaven. They write stories, poems, and songs, about the legions of Heaven locked in a titanic battle. Michael wielding a great flaming sword with great broad strokes, cleaving here and there, leaving carnage in his wake. Grappling with Lucifer at the end in a match straight out of Wrestlemania. Ultimate triumph with flaming wings and heavy impacts with the ground.
But truthfully it was very quiet, less dramatic, more subtle, and terrible. Try to imagine having lived your entire life with a certainty of purpose. A voice and presence within you that guides your every thought and action. No uncertainty, no confusion. A flood of love and acceptance that encompasses the whole of your being. And in one horrific moment it is gone. The voice is stilled, and all that is left is emptiness. A deep, dark, endless plain of nothing. You can't even hear your own voice as you cry out. There is no light. No warmth. No love. A forever of cold, lonely night, with no stars or moon.
Quite a few of us just went mad. In fact I am not sure that any of us were, or are, really sane anymore.
DragonFire:
Hmm. I like it...I like the set up, I like the premise and I quite like the character.
I would like to know a little more about the plot, however.
Flashand:
--- Quote from: The Morning Ogre on March 04, 2009, 11:22:52 PM ---I made a rather large mistake a few eons ago and listened to a fella named Lucifer.
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#1 error is the names of the fallen angels. Lucifer is litarally translated as liar and does not turn up in historical documents in the church until after Paul. ie you want Satan or Sin. Simple info, hard to get. You wouldnt want to be called by some one elses name either right? Also Not sure when Damien/on appeared but it is loosly translated as childlike behavior. (try hebrew/anchient)
--- Quote --- Once those of us who were stupid enough, or deluded enough, made the decision to oppose the Will of the Word, it was pretty much a foregone conclusion. Michael and the rest just did the mopping up and we were gone.
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Will of the word. The word of god is Jesus, are you sure this is the right concept you wish to depict?
--- Quote --- Angels don't get it so easy. You see, we weren't supposed to need a savior.
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Only until the Messiah, ie Jesus, were angels unwashed into heaven. (? not sure if i am stating this correctly.) All others that become angels through thoughts and deeds this is the imperitive parts that the religiose forget to point out. They think you get it from the start.
--- Quote --- Which brings me to my current predicament. You see as I said before, fallen angels do not have anyone to pay for our sins. We weren't supposed to need it. But the Word is merciful and gave us an out. Those of us who truly repent are born into the world of man, and work to do what we can to ease the misery caused by our fallen brothers and sisters. The catch? We pretty much have no powers at all in the physical world. The bodies we have are just as frail as anyone elses. We can get sick. We can get hurt. We age. And we die. If we have done enough to earn redemption then we get to come home and resume our former position. If not, well, let's just say none of us really want to know. But there is one caveat. If we are killed by another of the fallen, or due to their connivance, then we are born again into the world of man to try again.
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Right on the money on this one! good job!
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Alright i read it good job i must say, and believe it or not you have to actually go to the Vatican to get the complete list of angels. They do have a book they do not allow it out. I am not sure if i got lucky when i was allowed to see it or not :P Good start though.
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