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Offline CenturionsofRome

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Adflictus Planis- feedback please
« on: January 12, 2014, 09:27:10 PM »
I have begun writing my series Adflictus Planis, and I have finished the first four chapters already. I would like feedback on whether you guys like it or not, and wheter anyone would be interested in buying the book when it's published.
Chapter 1: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-1-421325955
Chapter 2: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-2-423672121
Chapter 3: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-3-425233438
Chapter 4: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-4-426522376
I will only be posting these four chapters online. If anyone is interested in becoming a beta reader, please contact me.
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Re: Adflictus Planis- feedback please
« Reply #1 on: January 15, 2014, 04:02:05 AM »
I have begun writing my series Adflictus Planis, and I have finished the first four chapters already. I would like feedback on whether you guys like it or not, and wheter anyone would be interested in buying the book when it's published.
Chapter 1: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-1-421325955
Chapter 2: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-2-423672121
Chapter 3: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-3-425233438
Chapter 4: http://centurionsofrome.deviantart.com/art/Adflictus-Planis-Herald-of-Change-Chapter-4-426522376
I will only be posting these four chapters online. If anyone is interested in becoming a beta reader, please contact me.

It says here is chapter one and below it are lots of 'oh this is great' comments but as for the body of the text... nada.



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Re: Adflictus Planis- feedback please
« Reply #2 on: January 16, 2014, 02:53:24 AM »
It may have to do with the Mature content filter being on, and not being abu to change it unless you're a devientart member....

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