Alright I'll try the opening of the piece that I started last yeat but lost modivational steam on...let me know if i sould leave it alone or revisit it when I get a chance.

The prisoner opened his eyes and rolled over onto his stomach.  He reached out his hand to hover above a tiny speaker set into the heavy metal frame of his bed.   “4, 3, 2, 1”, he said out loud and then covered the speaker. 

“GOOD MORNING 1012 – RECOUP TIME IS OVER –TODAY YOU’RE ASSIGNED TO THE LAB AND THE DOCTOR IS ALREADY WAITING SO GET MOVING. - NORISHMENT IN 5 MINUTES.”

 Everyday had started the same way for the past 13 months.  If he hadn’t started covering the speaker during the first week he’d probably gone deaf before too long.  He rolled back over, sat up, and closed his eyes preparing for part two of this ritual awakening.  Instantly the room was filled with light so bright he could see it through his eye lids.   “That’s another point for me Doc.”  He considered anytime the Doc failed at making him miserable a small victory in their silent war.  If life in prison had taught him anything, it was to revel in the small victories because you simply never had any other kind.  He smiled the only smile he expected to have all day and began to get ready. 
The Doc is waiting….that’s just great he thought and looked around his room.  Room, yeah right, technically it was his 5 foot cube “cell” but he’d decided long ago that to maintain a positive outlook he would think of it as his, very very cozy, room.  True, he could never fully stretch his 5’11’’ frame while inside his room, but on the bright side, it was a cinch to clean up.

Hooked or Not?

Thanks LizW65, the confusing lines you referenced were a result of a poor cut and paste job on my part, but thanks for the feedback.  I took this right out of the middle of my chapter four, and I realize it doesn't really make perfect sence, out of context.  You're feeling is right.  The liquid magic is not alcohol, and the main character is 15 years old.  Should have mentioned that too.  Still working on it.

Kris_W... thanks for the tips.  I will check them out! 

Okay, first off let me apologize for not realizing that there was a difference between copyright and copywrite.  After days of no response on this I picked up a book on the subject and it was brought to my attention that I'd spelled copyright wrong and that might be why nobody responded.  I corrected the spelling in the subject box.  Personally I think nobody responded 'cause the subject was rather dull. And theres always Google, Anyway confusion over.  Lesson learned.

Fantastic feedback,  Thanks so much.  It's opening up a sorts of possibilities I hadn't thought of. keep em coming everyone.

My request for what makes a great villian great was so helpful to my current project, and big thanks for that.  Now I'd like to hear everyone's opinions on side kicks, or the hero's reflection in the story if you'd all be so kind.  No holds barred.  Bring it on.

well why can't the scariest, most dastardly, effective and potent villain be your favorite.  Likeable doesn't mean nice at least in my opinion.  thanks for the feedback though.

This is fun. 
I know I'm being stupid but I'm nervous to put any of my current ideas out into an open forum.  I'll try to write something now just as an exercise.  I'll try to post it soon.  Anyway keep it up all you brave writers.