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Author Craft / Re: Okay new game: hooked or not hooked.....
« on: February 22, 2010, 10:58:03 PM »
    It was a Dream...

   All I could hear was the ringing in my ears, oh how I wish it to stop! All I could feel was a fire across my back, and a drum in my head. Even though I can feel these earthly pains I stand in whiteness, with a holo-monitor. It’s always the same... I stand their looking at a screen portraying my life, but nothing of what I want to see. Always the horrors that haunt me, lives I’ve snuffed out, destruction that I’ve caused. Images of battles, of torment. It haunts me, makes me want to pull my heart out of my chest! The choking feeling always nags at me... Never leaves me... Until I wake...
        I looked at myself in the mirror, and saw someone nearly zombie-like staring back. Six and a half foot tall. Scruffy, dirty black hair. Left brown eye, and right one red, a slight discoloration around my right eye.  Across my body I saw many scars, my right arm was gone, in it’s place was a metallic limb. A prostheses. Same was true for my entire right leg. Half my abdomen was missing too, in place was a metal bracer for my left side. I can’t remember what happened to them, for as long as I could remember, I’ve had these. I can only remember the past 70 years of my life, and I haven’t changed physically in all that time.
        I turned my back to the mirror, and assessed the damage. A large cut, stretched across my back, from my left shoulder and too the right side of my lower back. That might get infected. Flash backs of the days before played through my mind, I was ontop of a cargo truck manning a machine gun, we were transporting valuables from one city to another.  Stuff like food and medical supplies. It was a low tier escort job.  There wasn’t supposed to be any trouble, but a scum infested gang tried stealing the supplies. On had gotten on the transport with a machete and decided to see if was still sharp by slashing it across my back. On top of all that the second transport was demolished. Which is why I only got 2,600 creds’, instead of the promised 5,000. Which left me short on a huge upgrade for my Armored Power Fram that I wanted.

   Sighing I got into the vapor shower.

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Author Craft / Re: *********************READ THIS!
« on: February 22, 2010, 11:04:13 AM »
Though Mickey has told me that we can link our stories from other boards or sites.

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Author Craft / Apollyon: Chapter 1 (if you like, chapter two)
« on: February 22, 2010, 10:57:26 AM »
well since the revision post was deleted, I decided to repost my story. thanks Mickey for telling me about a loop-hole in the rules.

it's a Sci-fiction novel. takes place in post apocalyptic future. the surface is completely desolate, and Covered in radiation. It follows a Merc who has been alive for more than 70 years, yet he doesn't age. I've revised it..twice...since i've started the project. I had up to 17 chapters done. but didn't like the way I went about it. I plan on having on sequel novel, and atleast one prequel novel. maybe another sequel novel taking place further into the future after this novel. I hope to have this published within the year.

Apollyon.

critique is welcome. hope you enjoy.

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Author Craft / (New writer, new book) Oblivion - Survival. feedback welcome
« on: February 14, 2009, 01:58:46 AM »
Hi there fellow JB fans. I'm writing a new book and wanted a few suggestions from other people who like Jim butcher. here is the first chapter and I was hoping for feedback and suggestions.


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