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How graphic do you like yours?
Murphy's Stunt Double:
ok, I'll bite... why did it make you shudder? Because it's graphic or because it's cheesy?
JamiSings:
--- Quote from: neurovore on March 01, 2008, 06:12:00 PM ---Um, the prose there made me shudder.
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Well, I couldn't exactly say the real thing, could I? Besides, I wrote it cheesy romance novel style.
What did you want me to say? Something about being rammed?
the neurovore of Zur-En-Aargh:
--- Quote from: JamiSings on March 02, 2008, 02:13:08 AM ---Well, I couldn't exactly say the real thing, could I? Besides, I wrote it cheesy romance novel style.
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I know. You got the style down well; the style itself makes me shudder.
I don't have a solution here, because the options the language actually has in it for the descriptions here are childish words, rude words, clinical words or a fairly predictable set of metaphors. And the sort of moods I'm most often interested in writing to, none of those really fit.
Being rammed is a thing that happens, in my books, to doors, when half a dozen hefty chaps carrying a sizable log between them get a running start. Not to people. Though mind you, I've done a relationship or two best described as "two ships crashing in the night", and "rammed" is not an inappropriate adjective in that situation.
Murphy's Stunt Double:
Yes, I must admit, that's the biggest challenge I face when I write smut scenes... the descriptive options leave much to be desired... no pun intended.
LizW65:
For some hilariously bad sex writing (all from published sources) click here:
http://books.guardian.co.uk/print/0,,331379643-99819,00.html
I take no responsibility for injuries done to oneself while in the throes of mirth.
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