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Weaverchilde:
I am looking to find a writers group and am hoping that someone can direct me to such a thing or is willing to give feedback. I am currently working on short stories only, but hope to move into novels when time allows. Also any suggestions on where short stories can get published would be appreciated.
For those interested in what I have ready for feedback, http://weaverchilde.livejournal.com/1764.html
Dave Bozarh
"A mind without purpose will wander in dark places."
Apocrypha:
Have you heard of www.zoetrope.com ? Reviewing is part of the process there but all submitted pieces have to be complete.
Lanodantheon:
Zoetrope's a goo site. I highly recommend it.
belial.1980:
I checked out your story. Overall it was quiyr good. One minor change I'd suggest is starting off with the drop off. Jump right into the airplane suddenly coming under heavy fire--bullets tearing through the cabin, some guy's head turning into red mist, the sudden sensation of falling then the strange, easy calm of free fall as the narrator parachutes to the drop zone.
Other than that, I'd recommend researching military jargon, and having the characters throw around some authentic acronymns. (The US Army seems to have an acronymn for just about everything.) Don't go so heavy as to lose readers who aren't familiar with those terms, but I think dropping a few in would be good for the story.
Nice work. Good luck!
Apocrypha:
--- Quote from: Lanodantheon on May 02, 2009, 12:24:40 AM ---Zoetrope's a goo site. I highly recommend it.
--- End quote ---
Are you there as well, Lanodantheon?
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